frozen waterfall mouth

1.16.2016

frozen waterfall

mouth

grins out at

us

 

what are you

doing

so wrapped

up

 

come play with

me

if you

can.

==============

 

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3 Responses to frozen waterfall mouth

  1. theweavr says:

    Forgive me if I come off a bit harsh but first of all I will sincerely praise this. Your work is astonishingly beautiful and the imagery is quite wonderful. The first stanza seriously invoked in me a deep feeling.
    Your point of writing poetry is, i think, to express yourself fully but this goes no where near poetry, even if you call it free verse, this won’t come near it. It is a wonderful writing, I must say, quite exquisite and unique but don’t try to turn a prose into a poem. You can express yourself as thoroughly with prose as with poetry.
    This is just my point of view, ignore it if you must but don’t take offence 🙂 Finally, keep writing and writing and writing….good luck! 🙂 🙂 ❤

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